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Post by Laura J on Jan 12, 2015 4:56:49 GMT 8
Between Two Worlds
Swirling colors, psychedelic dreams Moving through time on chariots unseen
Light fills the room My eyes squint tight Pulling up blankets To cover me eyes
Deep in my mind I try to be still Find my center And give her my will
Letting go my reality Entering hers She has what I need She is my cure
I hold on so tight Don't want to let go My alarm clock is ringing I must start the show
My screen play of life I put on my clothes Trousers and shirt Work calls I must go
But when I get down And life tears at my soul I look back to my heart And know right where to go
Beneath the shirt and trousers The deep voice and the laugh There's a female deep inside me And its time to let her out.
~me~ Jan. 11, 2015
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Post by Deleted on Jan 13, 2015 8:07:16 GMT 8
How about a chorus in there somewhere? Gawd! Poets and not songwriters. Love it though. How about some Edgar Allan Poe type poetry? Long and something to sink my teeth into.
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Post by Laura J on Jan 14, 2015 8:04:25 GMT 8
Well HELL, I'll have to go to college to learn how to write like that..? *sticks out tongue*.. Just simple thoughts.... From a simple mind....
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Post by Deleted on Jan 14, 2015 12:23:48 GMT 8
Well HELL, I'll have to go to college to learn how to write like that..? *sticks out tongue*.. Just simple thoughts.... From a simple mind.... That is far from simple and way far from a simple mind. Give yourself some credit. Words are hard to come by. I could probably write a novella or short story, actually I have before, but poetry kills me. I have one hell of an imagination but making words flow like that? Forget about it. I can do alright on composing riffs and choruses on the guitar but words? I have ideas but can't make them flow out in a poetic way.
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Post by Deleted on Jan 16, 2015 7:28:51 GMT 8
Mark. Don't put too much emphasis on "learning" how to write. It comes from your heart. It is legible. It flows. When you go to a school to learn something then you learn to do what others have done before you. You end up copying others that came before you. So in my case, take Dickey Betts, self taught guitar player. No lessons. Jimi Hendrix, Hell people play Hendrix chords all the time he was self taught. Albert King of the Texas Blues infamy, plays everything upside down for a lefty. Who the hell can teach you that? But it comes from inside and a lot of practice. Your style of writing, what is in your heart and it will be much better and authentic and be more from you and not a pedigree hanging from your wall. It will be from your soul and not your education. I love you poems and they would rival any poet out there alive or dead. Art and talent is not about being educated but how well you can put your feelings across. That is Soul.
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